Learn to use /video avi in Wolfcam instead of capturing with Fraps... The movie is like 10 FPS sometimes.
There's even console visible at 7:25 :)
General movie making:
2:30 intro? That's longer than my whole movie :)
When it's clearly visible what happened in a scene, you really shouldn't replay it from different angles, it only breaks the flow. Fancy cameras are nice for intros/outros, but otherwise should only be used to explain something hard/impossible to catch otherwise (like a grenade killing 3 people behind a wall, or some double rails).
Pummel on fatal1ty is a cliché.
That's all. The frame rate was the biggest problem, otherwise I still enjoyed it :)